I think the most striking thing about this to me is your decision to get a POV on both sides of the chase. It's somehow even more immersive that way. Very good!
Great title, great concept, great story. You captured the mounting dread and I felt the visceral cold. I really liked how you switched between past and present. I didn't even notice the device at first (because I was just in it), and it helped the wolf's senses feel really immediate. Well done!
Oh, the wild land of fairytale! I love to read and write them (several will be coming along on my stack, in fact). This was shivery and ghostly, with that steely core good fairytales have- the hard finality of the lesson that is always so visceral and so satisfying. I want more!
Just finished reading and taking notes! Your story has been officially received, and you'll get some detailed comments when I send you the scoring. This was INTENSE from start to finish--I loved the drama of this story. I know your future challenge entries are going to impress! Great work!
I think the most striking thing about this to me is your decision to get a POV on both sides of the chase. It's somehow even more immersive that way. Very good!
Great title, great concept, great story. You captured the mounting dread and I felt the visceral cold. I really liked how you switched between past and present. I didn't even notice the device at first (because I was just in it), and it helped the wolf's senses feel really immediate. Well done!
Visceral and disturbing!! :)
So good, and so intense!! One of my favorite devices you used was how each section shortened as the climax approached, which ratcheted up the tension.
Oh, the wild land of fairytale! I love to read and write them (several will be coming along on my stack, in fact). This was shivery and ghostly, with that steely core good fairytales have- the hard finality of the lesson that is always so visceral and so satisfying. I want more!
Just finished reading and taking notes! Your story has been officially received, and you'll get some detailed comments when I send you the scoring. This was INTENSE from start to finish--I loved the drama of this story. I know your future challenge entries are going to impress! Great work!
This is brilliant! Love the changing POV, and the twist in that last line is the cherry on the cake!