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polytropos's avatar

oof that ending!!

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Hanna Delaney's avatar

Worse than the fictional thing, eh? 😄 I remember an episode of Jonathan Creek featuring drowned bodies. I didn't get a bath for weeks---I stayed safe in the shower. Well, it's safe as long as Norman Bates isn't around...

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K.C. Knouse's avatar

Mommy never left. Clever use of the suitcase to seal the ending, Hanna. The description of Jenny Greenteeth kind of grossed me out. There was a boy in grade school who had green teeth. We all thought it was because he ate grass.

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Hanna Delaney's avatar

Do you think he did eat grass? I know it stains clothes etc. Hadn't thought of teeth.

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K.C. Knouse's avatar

We never had any evidence other than his teeth. It was just speculation on our part. Looking back on it, he probably hadn’t had his teeth cleaned in a long time. Congratulations on the successful sales of your books. Quite a feat, Hanna.

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Stephanie Sweeney's avatar

The suitcase!

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Hanna Delaney's avatar

😅 the horror of it!

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Richard Ritenbaugh's avatar

I guess he was no catch. Great story, Hanna!

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Hanna Delaney's avatar

Thanks Richard.

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Lyndsey Resnick's avatar

Oh my...this is fantastic!

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Hanna Delaney's avatar

It will never not baffle me how the things I write in a quick blitz the day before do well. Thanks, Lyndsey. I enjoyed writing this one.

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Lyndsey Resnick's avatar

No time to overthink it!

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Hanna Delaney's avatar

Maybe that's the problem. Too much time can kill a good story!

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Lyndsey Resnick's avatar

Sometimes the stories have been cooking awhile, even without consciously focusing on them and they come out whole. I’ve had it happen. It’s an odd thing, but also should reassure you that the stories are waiting for you!

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Liz Zimmers's avatar

Excellent!

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Hanna Delaney's avatar

Thank you. I appreciate the Liz-shaped endorsement.

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Parrish Baker's avatar

I began to get concerned about the end as it got nearer but it was still a shock!

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Hanna Delaney's avatar

hahaha. Twists. I love a twist. Thank you for reading.

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Sarah Moorcroft's avatar

Fabulous:)

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Hanna Delaney's avatar

Thank you, Sarah.

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Angel's avatar

What a fiction piece!

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Wendy Cockcroft's avatar

Great story, great atmosphere. Quibble: What was once an old-fashioned.

An old-fashioned what?

Apart from that, perfect.

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Hanna Delaney's avatar

An old fashioned is a classic whiskey cocktail, Wendy. Thanks for reading!

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Wendy Cockcroft's avatar

Thank you. Note to self: get ingredients for this.

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Anne Hickley's avatar

I love the fact that I never see your endings coming! 😀

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Hanna Delaney's avatar

😅 I think I saw my husband recoil when I said how the ending was going to be.

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Anne Hickley's avatar

😂

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