Laugh out loud funny. Holy moly. Well done. This was a tough challenge, but WOW. Can't wait to get the write-up done for this. Your story has been officially received!
The whole story from an inner monologue; what an interesting format! It really takes from the unreliable narrator trope and forces the readers to try and discern what parts of the story are fact and which are the distortions of the character's mind!
This is AMAZING! So hilarious and clever, and it just gets better with each reread. The bit with the boxes was SO FUNNY the second time around, when I knew what was going on. 😂
This one was lovely Hannah. So wholesome, it reminded me of clockwork orange in the way the narrator goes about but less violent. I really thought it was a solitary cell but the scratch part got me thinking otherwise and I laughed.
Awesome job.
When I started reading this I thought I would give this challenge a try, so I am embarking on a post for that. But when I finished it, I thought damn, Hannah pulled a fast one. Thank you for such a great piece I might just read more than once.
Thank you for your encouraging words, Ika. Those last couple of lines were crucial to how this whole story was going to go down. I agonised over them for a couple of days but finally, they came to me. In the last story, there was a comment about it being confusing who was the bear or wolf so I had to get this one clear as day.
😆 oh, this was good! Very clever. Cats would make terrible human beings, so for most of it I have to say I was giving your narrator the side-eye. But totally normal for a cat.
"They still come in and manhandle me, force feeding me tablets and water and shoving tubes everywhere" was about where a lightbulb came on for me - God knows I've struggled to pill more than my fair share of cats.
This is fantastic, Hanna! The 'stream of consciousness' narration was pitched and paced perfectly (no pun intended 😛) They reminded me of Brad Pitt's character babbling away in 'Twelve Monkeys'. Once or twice, I thought: 'how is this going to end?' – but you kept the secret so well!
That’s what I call misdirection.
How far did you get until you realised? 😂
For me, it was the line about having his balls cut off. I was like, "I bet homeboy is a cat."
😂 He is indeed. Thanks for reading, Josh!
The very end!
Excellent. Thank you for reading!
Literally the very end!! Oh my goodness! I need to go reread this right now!
I was mislead too and I loved it
Laugh out loud funny. Holy moly. Well done. This was a tough challenge, but WOW. Can't wait to get the write-up done for this. Your story has been officially received!
Thanks, Scoot!
The whole story from an inner monologue; what an interesting format! It really takes from the unreliable narrator trope and forces the readers to try and discern what parts of the story are fact and which are the distortions of the character's mind!
Thanks. It was a wild, out of the box choice. I don't usually do internal monologues so it was fun to experiment.
Oh that was brilliant. Thank you for the laugh!
This is AMAZING! So hilarious and clever, and it just gets better with each reread. The bit with the boxes was SO FUNNY the second time around, when I knew what was going on. 😂
Thank you Bridget 😄
This one was lovely Hannah. So wholesome, it reminded me of clockwork orange in the way the narrator goes about but less violent. I really thought it was a solitary cell but the scratch part got me thinking otherwise and I laughed.
Awesome job.
When I started reading this I thought I would give this challenge a try, so I am embarking on a post for that. But when I finished it, I thought damn, Hannah pulled a fast one. Thank you for such a great piece I might just read more than once.
Thank you for your encouraging words, Ika. Those last couple of lines were crucial to how this whole story was going to go down. I agonised over them for a couple of days but finally, they came to me. In the last story, there was a comment about it being confusing who was the bear or wolf so I had to get this one clear as day.
That was brilliant.
Thank you so, so much.
That was so clever! I didn't realise until the very last paragraph... and now I'm going back and laughing at all the places where there were hints!
Thank you. I had a lot of fun editing it because I had to get those last two lines or so perfect 😄
😆 oh, this was good! Very clever. Cats would make terrible human beings, so for most of it I have to say I was giving your narrator the side-eye. But totally normal for a cat.
"They still come in and manhandle me, force feeding me tablets and water and shoving tubes everywhere" was about where a lightbulb came on for me - God knows I've struggled to pill more than my fair share of cats.
"totally normal for a cat" absolutely 😅 I love how we welcome these psycho killers into our homes. They're so cute though.
So good, and the narrator was spot on! I’m sure that is exactly the thought process of the…erm… incarcerated. Loved it!
😂 Thank you Liz. This was so stressful but I am thrilled to hear it landed as intended.
This is fantastic, Hanna! The 'stream of consciousness' narration was pitched and paced perfectly (no pun intended 😛) They reminded me of Brad Pitt's character babbling away in 'Twelve Monkeys'. Once or twice, I thought: 'how is this going to end?' – but you kept the secret so well!
Thank you, Johnathan! I'm so glad to hear that you enjoyed it.
Very clever - a really good read!
Poor baby!
Oh I'm sure she'll make it all better.
Siamese?
He wouldn't disclose. Said it was breaching GDPR or something.
I did not anticipate the unexpected twist in your story! Brilliant!
Thank you Charlotte 😄
My pleasure, of course! xoxo
Hoo ra.
Thank you.
What a clever work! Never saw the end coming.
Thank you Hyun Woo 😊 I'm glad it got you.