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Liz Zimmers's avatar

Oh, that’s grim and sad. I’d like to take that woman to a movie and buy her all the popcorn she wants.

Hanna Delaney's avatar

Same. The death of a marriage is always hard to watch.

Keith Long's avatar

Tricky tricky!

Susurrant Horror's avatar

Oh this was sad. I really liked the disjointed frame of mind perspective.

Well That Ended Badly's avatar

That was fantastic!

Evelyn K. Brunswick's avatar

Brilliantly done, especially as a monologue. Reminded me of one of those Tales of the Unexpected. I could imagine some great northern actress performing this, perhaps on Radio 4 or in one of those old BBC2 plays for today.

Hanna Delaney's avatar

Thanks, Evelyn. I have a few monologues like this. Might herd them and stick them in a book.

Evelyn K. Brunswick's avatar

Good idea. I’m sure you have enough shorter pieces to fill a collection by now…

Hanna Delaney's avatar

There are a few. Theming pieces is hard, and requires a bit of time. I'll get there eventually.

FranB's avatar

Great twist!

Hanna Delaney's avatar

Thanks, Fran. She did kill her husband in an earlier iteration of this tale, but I decided this was better. My readers are starting to worry. 🤣

Nick Richards's avatar

Brilliant!

Hanna Delaney's avatar

Thank you. Sadder than the first version of this tale, but I like it.

M Jarret Porter's avatar

Like that Hanna, out of the sheer drudgery and madness of a situation comes the rhymes striving to hold sanity together..

Hanna Delaney's avatar

Yes. The mundane can bring out the madness. Thank you for reading.

Richard Ritenbaugh's avatar

Madness. Sheer madness.

E. H. Lau's avatar

Very creepy... and that almost-singsong narration just adds to it! 😱